Throughout life, people have to face challenging situations and go against obstacles. Whether these obstacles are critical to one's life, dangerous, emotional, or don't affect the person greatly, people have to overcome and get around one obstacle until the next ones comes up. Like what Ken Lintz said, "An obstacle is often an unrecognized opportunity," meaning that overcoming an obstacle can lead to great success in a new opportunity, is something that everyone can learn.
In The Old Man and the Sea, Santiago is challenged to fight his way through multiple forces. Him trying to overcome these obstacles are not just because of the threat to his survival, but also for his own personal content and confidence. All throughout the book, the Old Man has to face the power of the Marlin, the sharks and ocean, his own loneliness without the boy there with him, and his lack of energy. His peaceful fishing adventure changed to a not so happily ever after ending unfortunately. Without breaking down these barriers one at a time, Santiago would never have been able to progress like he did though, even if in the end he didn't end up bringing home the Marlin as proof.
Throughout the entire story, Santiago is facing all the elements within the ocean. These include the Marlin, sharks, finding food, and more. For the majority of the story the Marlin is the main struggle and obstacle the Old Man must overcome. Even though Santiago is very anxious to bring the Marlin home, he doesn't rush the hunt and remains patient. Catching this fish would mean he would break his bad luck streak that had been going on for over eighty days, and he would gain more respect as a fisherman, not only from other people, but himself.
Also, there are multiple minor obstacles including the sharks and also Santiago making sure that he provides for himself by catching food. In the end, the Old Man defeats the Marlin. With the Marlin on the side of the boat though, it doesn't mean it will be safe. The aggressive sharks come and quickly pick away at the Marlin leaving nothing, "I could not have expected to kill them, he thought. I could have in my time. But I have hurt them both badly and neither one can feel very good," (114).
Another critical part of his journey is that the Old Man must be cautious about making sure he takes in enough food for energy. Although Santiago managed to catch the Marlin and catch enough food to stay alive, the sharks took away what he had worked so hard for but Santiago never gave up on trying to beat the sharks.
On this fishing outing, Santiago was all alone. Manolin, the boy, wasn't there as someone he could talk to or use as a second pair of hands. Even though Santiago is very wise, he is also very aged and worn out. Without the boy there, Santiago is lonely and begins to not only talk to himself, but also the dead Marlin. At one point, Santiago hurts himself badly with the rope like in this passage, "If the boy were here he would wet the coils of line, he thought. Yes. If the boy were here. If the boy were here," (83). The Old Man is so used to having Manolin there to admire him and keep him company. Since he is alone and traveling solo on this trip, Santiago has to work extra hard physically and also mentally because he has no one to talk to. That is another example of an obstacle that Santiago has to overcome throughout The Old Man and the Sea.
Lastly, lack of energy and tiredness are a big barrier for Santiago while overcoming the Marlin. Due to having to hold the rope at all times and the Marlin pulling the boat outwards, it was very difficult and rare for the Old Man to find time to rest. Like in this passage, "Even if I sleep twenty minutes or a half hour it is good. He lay forward cramping himself against the line with all his body, putting all his weight onto his right hand, and he was asleep," (81) shows how valuable time to sleep was to Santiago. He managed to overcome this though and find time to get small portions of rest in order to function and hunt down his prey, the Marlin.
All throughout the story, Santiago defeats many obstacles while mainly, only one defeats him. Without his effort and tenacious attitude to catch the fish, he probably would never have came close to catching the Marlin or making it home, Santiago should be proud of overcoming so many obstacles. Even when things started to get bad, the Old Man still tried and put in everything that he had in effort to save what he had won. During everyone's lifetime, they will go through hard times and most of these situations won't end easily, it takes time and effort. It may end how that person wanted it to, or it could be the total opposite, that's life.
In The Old Man and the Sea, Santiago is challenged to fight his way through multiple forces. Him trying to overcome these obstacles are not just because of the threat to his survival, but also for his own personal content and confidence. All throughout the book, the Old Man has to face the power of the Marlin, the sharks and ocean, his own loneliness without the boy there with him, and his lack of energy. His peaceful fishing adventure changed to a not so happily ever after ending unfortunately. Without breaking down these barriers one at a time, Santiago would never have been able to progress like he did though, even if in the end he didn't end up bringing home the Marlin as proof.
Throughout the entire story, Santiago is facing all the elements within the ocean. These include the Marlin, sharks, finding food, and more. For the majority of the story the Marlin is the main struggle and obstacle the Old Man must overcome. Even though Santiago is very anxious to bring the Marlin home, he doesn't rush the hunt and remains patient. Catching this fish would mean he would break his bad luck streak that had been going on for over eighty days, and he would gain more respect as a fisherman, not only from other people, but himself.
Also, there are multiple minor obstacles including the sharks and also Santiago making sure that he provides for himself by catching food. In the end, the Old Man defeats the Marlin. With the Marlin on the side of the boat though, it doesn't mean it will be safe. The aggressive sharks come and quickly pick away at the Marlin leaving nothing, "I could not have expected to kill them, he thought. I could have in my time. But I have hurt them both badly and neither one can feel very good," (114).
Another critical part of his journey is that the Old Man must be cautious about making sure he takes in enough food for energy. Although Santiago managed to catch the Marlin and catch enough food to stay alive, the sharks took away what he had worked so hard for but Santiago never gave up on trying to beat the sharks.
On this fishing outing, Santiago was all alone. Manolin, the boy, wasn't there as someone he could talk to or use as a second pair of hands. Even though Santiago is very wise, he is also very aged and worn out. Without the boy there, Santiago is lonely and begins to not only talk to himself, but also the dead Marlin. At one point, Santiago hurts himself badly with the rope like in this passage, "If the boy were here he would wet the coils of line, he thought. Yes. If the boy were here. If the boy were here," (83). The Old Man is so used to having Manolin there to admire him and keep him company. Since he is alone and traveling solo on this trip, Santiago has to work extra hard physically and also mentally because he has no one to talk to. That is another example of an obstacle that Santiago has to overcome throughout The Old Man and the Sea.
Lastly, lack of energy and tiredness are a big barrier for Santiago while overcoming the Marlin. Due to having to hold the rope at all times and the Marlin pulling the boat outwards, it was very difficult and rare for the Old Man to find time to rest. Like in this passage, "Even if I sleep twenty minutes or a half hour it is good. He lay forward cramping himself against the line with all his body, putting all his weight onto his right hand, and he was asleep," (81) shows how valuable time to sleep was to Santiago. He managed to overcome this though and find time to get small portions of rest in order to function and hunt down his prey, the Marlin.
All throughout the story, Santiago defeats many obstacles while mainly, only one defeats him. Without his effort and tenacious attitude to catch the fish, he probably would never have came close to catching the Marlin or making it home, Santiago should be proud of overcoming so many obstacles. Even when things started to get bad, the Old Man still tried and put in everything that he had in effort to save what he had won. During everyone's lifetime, they will go through hard times and most of these situations won't end easily, it takes time and effort. It may end how that person wanted it to, or it could be the total opposite, that's life.
The thesis states that obstacles occur throughout life and challenges have to be faced. It is very clear on the thesis.
ReplyDeleteWhen he talks about the boy that could be there with him it tells you how the old man feels without the boy.
"On this fishing outing, Santiago was all alone. Manolin, the boy, wasn't there as someone he could talk to or use as a second pair of hands." This tells you how the trip was for Santiago in a very thought out manner.
The essay was very well written and i have no suggestions for you.
The thesis of this essat is that everyday, people have obstacles they have to get by. Maddie is very clear with this thesis statement.
ReplyDeleteWhen she talks about the sharks, i think that is the best quotation. It shows the savageness of the two sharks and the braveness of the old man.
I think the essay has a good conclusion. Maddie does a good job of wrapping up the essay in a clear and through out way.
Maybe Maddie could've read it over and checked for a few conjunction errors, other then that, great job
I. The thesis is that people face challanging situations and obstacles through out our life. The thesis was clearly stated in the introduction. She uses a quote to help explain her thesis. It helped engage the reader.
ReplyDeleteII. I thought the first quote was the strongest. It was well described and was a good example of the obstacles that the old man faces in the story.
III. The flow was very well done. I liked that you kind of scrambled the quotes in the essay. The quotes were well explained and was reflected to the thesis.
IV. I would try to fix up the organization of the essay. It can get confusing at times. Also, check for small mistakes. Overall I thought it was a good essay.
I. The essays thesis is overcoming obstacles that you are challenged with throughout life. Maddie did a good job at making the thesis clear and easy to understand.
ReplyDeleteII. I think the last quote was used the best. It related directly to the topic sentence of the paragraph.
III. The essay uses good quotations from the book. It makes the examples more clear when the quotes are related directly to the examples.
IV. The essay was very good but i would suggest that Maddie proof reads the essay again to make sure she didn't miss any spelling or grammar errors.
1:Whether these obstacles are critical to one's life, dangerous, emotional, or don't affect the person greatly, people have to overcome and get around one obstacle until the next ones comes up. the thessis is clear and gives up a intro to the stroy.
ReplyDelete2:the secoond paragraph is probably the strongest it gives us details about the story and describes his obsitcles and how they challenged santiago.
3:switches from one obsticle to another, the writer makes the multiple subjects flow together so they make sense.
4:nothing needs to be revised on this essay it has great detail that describes the challenges.
great job :)
The thesis is each day people face obstacles. The thesis is very clear and is interesting. "If the boy were here he would wet the coils of line, he thought. Yes. If the boy were here. If the boy were here," (83). I think this was the best quote because i can picture Santiago saying this since hes so lonely. The strongest part was the intro and organization. Maddie grabs the readers attention with the intro and the essay flows very well. The essay was well written and nothing needs to be revised.
ReplyDeleteThe thesis is each day people face obstacles and have to overcome them. It is clear and concise. It is engages me.
ReplyDeleteThe strongest quote is the last one. It stands out and describes what Santiago had to do to overcome his obstacle. It stood out above the others because it was an example of the essay's topic.
The essay's introduction was done well. It was very organized. It explained the essay's examples.
I think the essay was very good. I don't think that it needs to be improved that much. It was well written.
The thesis of this essay is that there are many obtacles to face and overcome in life. I thought it was sharply concise, and i was definitely engaged. Quote: "Even if I sleep twenty minutes or a half hour it is good. He lay forward cramping himself against the line with all his body, putting all his weight onto his right hand, and he was asleep," (81) This was the strongest quote it was unique and went well in the paragraph it was in. I really enjoyed the flow of this essay. From one paragraph, to the next the fluency was greatly achieved. "Like what Ken Lintz said, "An obstacle is often an unrecognized opportunity," meaning that overcoming an obstacle can lead to great success in a new opportunity." How this statement and quote was encorporated in your first paragraph was a smart decision. It gives the reader a good insight on the writing.
ReplyDelete~Nice Work!
I.The thesis of this paper is that people face promblems in life and you must deal with them.The thesis was clear and focused and engaged me to keep reading the paper.
ReplyDeleteII"Even if I sleep twenty minutes or a half hour it is good. He lay forward cramping himself against the line with all his body, putting all his weight onto his right hand, and he was asleep," I thought this quote shows how much these fisherman get and than a half an hour is alot of sleep to them.
III.One thing that maddie did well was her organzation and her word choice i thought were the two best.
IV. She could work on her conclusion by putting some more oomph in it. I thought she did a good job though overall.
1. The thesis was that many people face obstacles and Santiago faced many obstacles himself.
ReplyDelete2. I think the strongest part was where she talked about how Santiago wished Manolin was there.
3. The writing style and organization both were good. The essay flowed very well. Felt as if i hadnt read 6 of these.....
4. There could have been a little bit more vocabulary in it to make it pop out more
I. The thesis of this essay is - "In The Old Man and the Sea, Santiago is challenged to fight his way through multiple forces" I think that this thesis is clear and focused, and is well supported.
ReplyDeleteII. I think that - "Even if I sleep twenty minutes or a half hour it is good. He lay forward cramping himself against the line with all his body, putting all his weight onto his right hand, and he was asleep," was the best quote that Maddie chose. I think it was a really good example and supported her idea really well. She also did a really good job with analyzing it.
III. I really liked Maddies writing style. It was unique to the other essays I have read. The quotes were different, and the way she explained everything was different and I really liked that.
IV. I did not find anything that you could fix about this essay. I thought it was really well written and you met all of the criteria for it to be graded. good job maddie :)
The thesis is that there are obstacles that have to be faced. It's very clear.
ReplyDelete"Even if I sleep twenty minutes or a half hour it is good. He lay forward cramping himself against the line with all his body, putting all his weight onto his right hand, and he was asleep." This one really spoke to me.
I like her writing style.
Nothing was wrong with it. It's perfect.
1. Her thesis statement is that every person faces obstacles in life. It's clear.
ReplyDelete2. I like the quote about how he wishes the boy were with him. I like it because it's kind of emotional.
3. I really like maddie's word choice. She sounds very intelligent. "All throughout the story, Santiago defeats many obstacles while mainly, only one defeats him. Without his effort and tenacious attitude to catch the fish, he probably would never have came close to catching the Marlin or making it home."
4. There is no weakest part. It is a wonderfullll esssayy :)
I. It's kind of unclear what or where the thesis is.
ReplyDeleteII. I think your second quote is the best integrated into the story.
III. I like the way you explain his motives. It goes well with your writing style
IV. The division of your paragraphs is very unclear. I would suggest separating each paragraph by a space.
I. Maddie's thesis is "In The Old Man and the Sea, Santiago is challenged to fight his way through multiple forces". I think that it's pretty good but could be alittle stronger.
ReplyDeleteII. I think the best quote used by Maddie is her last one, "Even if I sleep twenty minutes or a half hour it is good. He lay forward cramping himself against the line with all his body, putting all his weight onto his right hand, and he was asleep,". I think that it is well integrated into the story.
III. The best aspect of Maddie's essay is her tone, and writing style. She has a very strong voice and it really comes out in this essay. I really enjoyed reading it.
IV. This is a really good essay, the one thing I would suggest is to just check you mechanics. Go over your spelling, grammar, etc.
The thesis is that people face challenging situations and obstacles through out our life. The thesis was clearly stated in the introduction. She uses a quote to help explain her thesis. It helped engage the reader.
ReplyDeleteI thought the first quote was the strongest. It was well described and was a good example of the obstacles that the old man faces in the story. I liked the way you put the quotes into the essay. The quotes were well explained and reflected the thesis.I would try to fix up the organization of the essay. Also, check for small mistakes. Overall I thought it was a good essay.